#1
Had the chord progression in mind. Was messing on my keyboard and put on accomp and it came up with a really cool ballad style thing and so i played and recorded it up and then added some guitar. It could sound really cool with some vox so if your interested message me

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It's pretty empty thats why it needs vocals but it could be pretty cool.
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#2
It does sound really flat, er dry, or however you describe it, but I got more interested in it when the guitar came in:] the piano's good, just gets a little repeditive, but vocals would definately help that. I think this is pretty wicked after listening to it all, but at first it kinda bored me.

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#3
yeah... the beginning is pretty boring to be honest, but it gets pretty good after about a minute. I think it could be quite nice with some vocals over it. Maybe you should have a go at recording some makeshift ones yourself just to see how it sounds. The guitar playing is really nice though. It could be a pretty good song