#1
That Girl Over There

See that girl over there,
She’s gonna be mine. (yes she is, yes she is, yes she is.)
See at me how she stares,
She knows that she’s mine. (yes she is, yes she is, yes she is.)
Cause I’m the one, I’m the one, I’m the one,
Who’s gonna be her man.

Things fell through with my girl,
And now I’m lonely. (Nothing new, not for you, not for you)
But now that I’ve seen you,
think of you only (yes I do, yes I do, yes I do.)
Cause you’re the one, you’re the one, you’re the one,
Who could be my gal.

I go over and say,
“How are you doing?” (Doing good, doing fine, quite okay.)
Must be my lucky day,
She I am wooing. (Practice plays, practice praise, practice pays.)
Yes, she’s the one, she’s the one, she’s the one,
Who’s gonna be my gal.

Girl says to me,
“Boy I’ve seen you before.” (Maybe twice, maybe thrice, maybe four.)
Says she knew me,
Says she wants to know more. (What a get, what a hit, what a score!)
Cause I’m the one, I’m the one, I’m the one,
Who could be her man.

Yes I’m the one, I’m the one, I’m the one,
Who’s gonna be her man.
#2
Quote by Bryan C
That Girl Over There

See that girl over there,
She’s gonna be mine. (yes she is, yes she is, yes she is.)
See at me how she stares,
She knows that she’s mine. (yes she is, yes she is, yes she is.)
Cause I’m the one, I’m the one, I’m the one,
Who’s gonna be her man.

Mmmm, nice, nice. This reminds me of something Robert Plant would sing. I like it.

Things fell through with my girl,
And now I’m lonely. (Nothing new, not for you, not for you)
But now that I’ve seen you,
think of you only (yes I do, yes I do, yes I do.)
Cause you’re the one, you’re the one, you’re the one,
Who could be my gal.


Repitition I would usually reject, but since the song seems to be sung by lead and supporting vocals, it works


I go over and say,
“How are you doing?” (Doing good, doing fine, quite okay.)
Must be my lucky day,
She I am wooing. (Practice plays, practice praise, practice pays.)
Yes, she’s the one, she’s the one, she’s the one,
Who’s gonna be my gal.

Once again, not bad at all

Girl says to me,
“Boy I’ve seen you before.” (Maybe twice, maybe thrice, maybe four.)
Says she knew me,
Says she wants to know more. (What a get, what a hit, what a score!)
Cause I’m the one, I’m the one, I’m the one,
Who could be her man.

Here, I would maybe change it to Two, maybe three, maybe four...but then I dunno; thrice is what throws me off a little, but meh, it works I suppose

Yes I’m the one, I’m the one, I’m the one,
Who’s gonna be her man.


Ending is a bit short, but I think it works...maybe add a little something to emphasize your love for her even more...maybe just add something or try something a little more powerful...I'm at a loss for ideas right now, but I'm sure since you got this far, you can finish it splendidly

Crit mine if you want, "Windowpane"

Mark