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Alright first of all, THESE LYRICS ARE NOT MINE. They were written by a buddy of mine named Myke. I just thought they were simply amazing so check them out. Any suggestions feel free to let me know and i'll pass the word along to him.

It started with a familiar sadness,
I know I think I've had this
Dream before but will I wake up in time,
To catch my breath?
A death wish served on a platter of gold.
It's cold and the mornings shining in my eyes
In the dead of night.
Kiss all of my memories goodbye tonight
And I don't want to die. Maybe I do?
I wanna live my death in color sick of black and blue
You, claim to be content with all you got but then you,
Wash it away with just one more shot.
Is it ever gunna end? Did it even begin?
I can never really remember but I think I did it again
So I, close my eyes and breathe in deeper now.
I don't want to go to heaven hell is cheaper now.
So bartender let me get one for the road,
And forget about my coat I hear it's hot where I'm goin' now.


Give it time.
Just give it time, now.

A suicidal ravens waiting by my side,
Could I give it another chance before I lay down and die again?
Again and again before I come to my senses,
Again and again I guess I drugged my defenses.
It's killin' me just to think about the decisions that I've made in my life.
I've tried to give it up so many times and
I'm high now.
And I never want this feeling to go away.

So give it time.
Give it time now.

Give it time, get your mind right.
Let me be the first to say,
You got a ways to go child.
Fuss and fight about it all the time,
But it's never gunna work out right.

Give it time, get your mind right.
Let me be the first to say,
You got a ways to go child.
Fuss and fight about it all the time,
But it's never gunna work out right, no.

Stop the car,
Kill the ignition.
Forget about what they said
Let's break away from our traditions cause,
I want to wake up in a brand new state of mind.
Shake off this sleep and leave the world behind.
You nail the taste of a new beginning,
And I'll never fall in to the same old sense and Lord,
I spoke too soon again.
Lord I spoke too soon again.

Give it time.
Just give it time, now.

Give it time, get your mind right.
Let me be the first to say,
You got a ways to go child.
Fuss and fight about it all the time,
But it's never gunna work out right.
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#2
Quote by SimpleMan008
Alright first of all, THESE LYRICS ARE NOT MINE. They were written by a buddy of mine named Myke. I just thought they were simply amazing so check them out. Any suggestions feel free to let me know and i'll pass the word along to him.

It started with a familiar sadness,
I know I think I've had this
Dream before but will I wake up in time,
To catch my breath?
A death wish served on a platter of gold.
It's cold and the mornings shining in my eyes
In the dead of night.
Kiss all of my memories goodbye tonight
And I don't want to die. Maybe I do?
I wanna live my death in color sick of black and blue
You, claim to be content with all you got but then you,
Wash it away with just one more shot.
Is it ever gunna end? Did it even begin?
I can never really remember but I think I did it again
So I, close my eyes and breathe in deeper now.
I don't want to go to heaven hell is cheaper now.
So bartender let me get one for the road,
And forget about my coat I hear it's hot where I'm goin' now.

This seems to be hard to read, as this big huge stanza should be divided a little more, perhaps? But the content is good.

Give it time.
Just give it time, now.

If this is the chorus, it's a little short. But I like it, nonetheless.

A suicidal ravens waiting by my side,
Could I give it another chance before I lay down and die again?
Again and again before I come to my senses,
Again and again I guess I drugged my defenses.
It's killin' me just to think about the decisions that I've made in my life.
I've tried to give it up so many times and
I'm high now.
And I never want this feeling to go away.

Mmm, depressing and melancholy. 'Tis good, but maybe instead of "drugged", use like "shrugged off" as it might work better. But then again, drugs do add to the depression, but it sounds like he himself drugged himself...which maybe he did and now I'm just rambling and have gone insane....NICE

So give it time.
Give it time now.

Give it time, get your mind right.
Let me be the first to say,
You got a ways to go child.
Fuss and fight about it all the time,
But it's never gunna work out right.

Simple, and short, an ultimatum. Good.

Give it time, get your mind right.
Let me be the first to say,
You got a ways to go child.
Fuss and fight about it all the time,
But it's never gunna work out right, no.

Stop the car,
Kill the ignition.
Forget about what they said
Let's break away from our traditions cause,
I want to wake up in a brand new state of mind.
Shake off this sleep and leave the world behind.
You nail the taste of a new beginning,
And I'll never fall in to the same old sense and Lord,
I spoke too soon again.
Lord I spoke too soon again.

This did it for me; my favourite stanza. I like the bluntness, the demands; "Stop the car" ; "Kill the ignition".

Give it time.
Just give it time, now.

Give it time, get your mind right.
Let me be the first to say,
You got a ways to go child.
Fuss and fight about it all the time,
But it's never gunna work out right.


Overall yeah, good stuff, tell him I said it's good, but to break that stanza up. And to get his own UG profile, as he probably has more stuff to post, I'd imagine.
Comment on mine though, or critique it, - Windowpane

Thanks, and goood job

Mark