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Couple things I'm unsure of at the moment. Thoughts?

You probably couldn't hear a pin drop
Unaware if there's even a room
In this instant it's only us
And it's your turn to move

You're clutching that fist like you're afraid to lose it
Your eyes; awkwardly darting in front of me

(What you don't know is)
I can hear your thoughts in perfect rhythm to your heart
And I can see your smile through your bitter stare
You gave up all you worked for just to teach a lesson that can't be learned
How do you feel standing where the bridges burned?

The floorboard scratches at our feet
Time to put that strategy into play
Growing more impatient than I've ever been
and it's your turn again

Your stutter is only matched by your inability to choose
Left then, right now, or straight to sensibility?

(What you forget is)
I can hear your thoughts in perfect rhythm to your heart
And I can see your smile through your bitter stare
You gave up all you worked for just to teach a lesson that can't be learned
How do you feel standing where the bridges burned?

A single word, bad choice of reference
Honestly, if I've learned anything, honesty is overrated
Flip the switch, shine reason onto me
We can forget this ever happened
If you let it burn
Only, if you let it

I can hear your thoughts in perfect rhythm to your heart
And I can see your smile through your bitter stare
You gave up all you worked for just to teach a lesson that can't be learned
How do you feel standing where the bridges burned?

Honestly, honesty is overrated.


#2
very nice! thats good i believe. Excellent figure of speeches and your choice of words are great. I have nothin bad to say about it, now grab an instrument and write something for that (if u play something, lol) Now would u plz crit mine, i need opinions, well, everything thing i can take to see if i stick with what i got or i change it lol, click here plz.
Anyways good job, keep it up.