#1
This is a work in progress. There are lots of parts that don't flow well and need adjusting. It's kind of short for now, but I'll add more later. I need suggestions on how I can improve what I have so far.
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#2
Bar 24 is out of key? :]
But the rest sounds great.
Its got some weird [rythm?]
I don't know the right word xD
But yea it's great so far.

I don't know what you could do to make it sound different.
You could try to use more let ring in it maybe :]

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#3
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Bar 24 is out of key? :]
But the rest sounds great.
Its got some weird [rythm?]
I don't know the right word xD
But yea it's great so far.

I don't know what you could do to make it sound different.
You could try to use more let ring in it maybe :]

~Loki <3

Bar 24 just ended up with that darker sound, I'm debating whether I should change it.
#4
amazing peice youve started right there

good
-nice use chords and single notes
-bar 24 just sounded really good to me
mabey continues the song more towards that

improvable
-mabey let more ring out
-piano shred solo? haha

bad
-if you stop working on this

for a wip you get 9.5/10

good job

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#5
That was good, but the rythm after the intro was REALLY wierd. It didn't flow well at all. The second to last bar sounded out of key and dissonant, but I liked it. It sounded darker.

I'll give you an 8/10 as of now, because there isn't much to it.

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Last edited by PinkIsCool at Dec 2, 2007,