#1
This is just one of the many lyrics me and my band have written. Please give some un-biased feed back please. Thank-you

VERSE

Memories of great times disappearing
Desires of rage
Thoughts of Revenge
Building(whispered by backing vox)

VERSE

As he walks
He thinks he won
But we wont die

VERSE

You walk alone
Wondering why
isnt a game anymore
we are done playing


CHORUS

Trashing Houses
Smashing Cars
Not what you wanted
REVENGE!

VERSE

Sick of the lies
Its time to die
RUN!
HIDE!

CHORUS

Trashing Houses
Smashing Cars
Not what you wanted
REVENGE!

[BRIDGE/SOLO]
Run! Hide! (x5 build)

VERSE

Expecting forgiveness
He walks head held high
Thinking he still has us
Has us in his grasp

CHORUS

Trashing Houses
Smashing Cars
Not what you wanted
REVENGE!

#3
how does one leave unbiased feedback?


"these are words."

anyway. my opinion is that this is an unoriginal, unnecessary piece of trash. it lacks imagery. it lacks symbolism. it lacks creativity. it sounds like you're between the ages of 12 and 14.

good luck. keep working at it.