#1
Think "Not Now" by blink-182, but on steroids. This is going to be musically deep.. lots of guitar harmonies and powerful chord changes. Probably piano for the first verse and maybe the bridge.

"1.618"

Our last kiss left me walking a foot off of the ground
but I've begun to notice something
as winder chills the skies of this New England town

Why must some of us fade away?
they fall asleep day after day
So am I supposed to sit and wait?
is it better to leave at all or to stay?

the feeling is growing weak
you're being left behind
should I go back?
cause it's freaking me out now

this morning was the coldest one I remember
but not quite as bad as it could have been without her

some things I can't understand
about emotoins we consider love
there's a feeling I get when I hold your hand
but is it genuine?

the feeling is growing weak
you're being left behind
should I go back?
cause it's freaking me out now
I know you're the one
yes I know you're the one
but it's freaking me out now

It's not waking up that's hard
It's staying awake that we have trouble with
why isn't it under your control?

the feeling is growing weak
you're being left behind
should I go back?
cause it's freaking me out now
I know you're the one
yes I know you're the one
but it's freaking me out now
cause I don't know
#2
Hmm. It's not bad. The problem is, when you raise that many questions in a song, you better be able to answer them, or at least let us know that it's important that you don't know the answer. You being uncertain can lead to a lot of things, the relationship falling apart, it getting better, we don't know, so give us some idea of where you're going with your uncertainty at least.

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#3
well the context of the song is being unable to influence things beyond my control (and beyond my girlfriend's control, for that matter) in a relationship. I'm probably going to be writing several songs around the theme. You see, we've been dating for a long time and suddenly she's come down with lupus. It's scary, to say the least.
#4
Flesh eating diseases are never fun. Well, my advice to you then is to write however many songs you can. Write ten, write a hundred, hell, write a thousand. Once you've got them all written, go back and pick out the parts that you like from each and the images you find you consistantly use and I'll bet you can cannibalize those however many alright songs to make one really, really good one.

But basically, it sounds like you know what you want to say, so just write a ton and you'll get it.

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