#1
i like to dance. but i don't do it well
i like to sing. but my voice sound like hell
i like your eyes but they see right through mine
i like cliche's especially ones with happy endings
i like metaphors that are essentially empty
i like to wait until the last second to smile
words that mean nothing will be found out and drown
run on sentences really don't last that long
pretty girls make pretty songs come out of otherwise useless boys.
until another pretty girl comes along and says she's "taking pictures of the sky"
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#2
i like to dance. but i don't do it well
i like to sing. but my voice sound like hell sounds
i like your eyes but they see right through mine
i like cliche's especially ones with happy endings clichés -or- cliches
The weakness here is clichés are usually just phrases or short expression. They usually don't have an ending, although they might used in an ending. Not horrible. Not strong.
i like metaphors that are essentially empty
I didn't understand this at all.
i like to wait until the last second to smile
words that mean nothing will be found out and drown drowned
run on sentences really don't last that long
pretty girls make pretty songs come out of otherwise useless boys.
I like the message, but the words are clumsy. Worth another look at that line.
until another pretty girl comes along and says she's "taking pictures of the sky"
consider dropping and says she's

The repetition of i like works well.
Except for the empty metaphor line derailing this, it was a joy to read.
Meadows
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