#1
this is the lyrics to my bands new song, if you need any explanation on what its refering to, dont hesitate to ask, thanks -

fallen upon deafened ears

sought solace with contempt
from those who revel in your name
unmasked by your intent
subdued, your fall was imminent

a mass of innocence
subject to your calamities
acknowledged penitence
with claims of your hypocrisy

{spoken}
"you play god to the people
who have worked to deify you
and those at your command
will merit a mark of shame"

and to the pawns of war
you play on their integrity
and to their families
you feign a mere apology

what good is truth
when that which veils it's
but a cloak of lies
and when your words preach
deafened ears
your actions only rectify

yes, i know its another war song, but i just want to know what other people think of it.
Gear:
Ibanez Jetking
B.C Rich Warlock "Afterburner" SE
Behringer iAXE393-BK
Ashton Dualler Semi-Acousic
Randall RX120D Head/RX412 Cab (Slant)
Behringer V-TONE GM108
Last edited by Kill'Em'All89 at Dec 10, 2007,
#2
It's not too bad, but, much like many songs here, it seems a bit like you typed it up in Microsoft Word then just changed words into larger synonyms to sound smarter.
#3
yer, i would never do that, but still, i am a avid reader, so i suppose that helps
Gear:
Ibanez Jetking
B.C Rich Warlock "Afterburner" SE
Behringer iAXE393-BK
Ashton Dualler Semi-Acousic
Randall RX120D Head/RX412 Cab (Slant)
Behringer V-TONE GM108