#1
My second guessing stutter steps
seem to just come natural to me.
I must not be ready to move forward yet.
Dear, you know how it is.
I've heard you whisper
names like this under your breath.

Truthfully,
I still live with winter's touch.
Part of me still searches for love
in snow covered streets and back alleys
where every answer that I need
has been devoured
by the green grass beneath.
Last edited by LedZeppelin095 at Dec 13, 2007,
#2
I like it, the first two lines really caught my attention, I thought the first stanza was better then the second.

I still live with winter's touch.
Part of me still searches for love


I didn't care much for that part, but it's not bad or anything:]

It's pretty easy to relate to, I can't think of a whole lot to say about it, or anything to really improve.
#3
i disagree with the poster above,
those lines provide sort of a whispering "s" alliteration. It helps with the mood and kinda portrays loneliness.


...in fact, this whole song has a lot of alliteration...i'm guessing you did that on purpose?
Right? Right?
...right?