#1
"In The End"

Im cold and hungry
Im painfully scared
My heart is heavey
My body burned
My life is ending what have I learned

I waited for the answers
Insted of surching for them all
I knew nothing thought I knew it all
I would gladly give forever just to know how this all ends
Before I end my never ending fall
Will you tell me everything I didnt know
Please, TELL ME IT ALL

This is the hardest part of life
The time you have to say goodbye
Goodbye to your memories
Goodbye to all your fears
The time when you know you life has run out of years
The day you know you didnt do enough
The day when you look me in the eyes
That final day when we say our last goodbyes

I waited for the answers
Insted of surching for them all
I knew nothing thought I knew it all
I would gladly give forever just to know how this all ends
Before I end my never ending fall
Will you tell me everything I didnt know
Please, TELL ME IT ALL

I waited for the answers
Insted of surching for them all
I knew nothing thought I knew it all
I would gladly give forever just to know how this all ends
Before I end my never ending fall
Will you tell me everything I didnt know
Please, TELL ME IT ALL
#2
There are quite a few spelling mistakes, for example "insted" should be "instead", "surching" should be "searching" and "heavey" should be "heavy. Also, not that it's a major problem or anything, the line "My heart is heavey" is a little cliche.

Apart from those points, I liked this piece, I found myself getting drawn into it even within the first stanza. The theme is interesting and the repitition of certain words/phrases helps emphasise your point. Definitely an enjoyable read, I imagine it sounds even better with music. Good job
#3
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the title is a bit cliche, don't you think?
Look at my avatar and tell me it ain't the cutest baby you've ever seen.
#4
ya it was an old song i had and i just slapped a title on it to post it on here