#1
walking down
to the dead well,
convincing myself
of the modern qualities.

the water rose
and i saw my face
in the reflection,
past wishes and
old dreams.

internal silences,
my tongue tied,
i weaved through the astral plane,
and fell.

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just a short simple piece i wrote, tell me what you think!
"i'd give my soul to be where i was a year ago... if i had a soul left to give"
#2
Is it just a poem, or do u have music to go with it? It's pretty good as a poem, I think that with words it could be awesome.

There are a few parts that seem a bit wordy, but overall, very good!
TheInfringement
#3
walking down
to the dead well,
convincing myself
of the modern qualities.

dont understand the last line? but other then that good opening. cathces the attention

the water rose
and i saw my face
in the reflection,
past wishes and
old dreams.

very solid. like the stanza conveys emotion well. short but sweet and thats what makes it good.

internal silences,
my tongue tied,
i weaved through the astral plane,
and fell.

first three lines weere awsome. love the word choice "weaved through" is really cool. i dont like the "and fell" cause its really overused. if you go on to explain why you "fell" like say that the reflection faded, or something then id be alright but as it is i dont like the "and fell"

overall pretty cool. i really liked the simplicity of it, and how even though it was short and simple it had plenty of emotion and depth.
mind criting mine in my sig? thanks a ton