#1
Wrote this about my girl....


Through Your Eyes

(Verse1)
Thoughts of you is what helps me through
The darkest points of life
????....


(Pre-Chorus)
Seeing those beautiful green eyes
Is what helps me smile through the day
I love it when you stare at me
And leave me with nothing to say

(Chorus)
You're the flower over blossomed
You're the reason my soul will arise
I'll take my darkest grievances
And burn them through the fire that you light
And soon find peace through your eyes

(Verse2)
????.....

(Pre-Chorus)
I love it when you stare at me
And leave me with nothing to say
I have to hold my breath until you leave
If I don't you'll take it away

(Chorus)

(Bridge)
You have done the unthinkable
You have managed the impossible
You're my lady so divine
You have lifted my life

(Chorus)

(Outro)
I love,
Seeing those green eyes stare back at me
And the smile you leave,
Let's me know that this is no dream


Not finished yet......... what do ya think so far? C4C
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my last fail was breaking up with my gf.

that's going to suck for a while


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Well, not really haha!


#3
Thanks... i'm not sure on what to think about the wording though... i had one friend say that it was hard to understand the descriptive parts, but another one of my friends loved the wording in it... what do you think?
Quote by cpt_pimp
my last fail was breaking up with my gf.

that's going to suck for a while


Quote by leg end
Well, not really haha!


#4
Quote by popeye100


(Bridge)
You have done the unthinkable
You have managed the impossible
You're my lady so divine
You have lifted my life



I think that, right after 'impossible', you should add a short 'but', cuz that leads into the next line better. Overall though, awesome song, lots of meaning. Very good.
TheInfringement
#5
^^...I don't follow...^^
Quote by cpt_pimp
my last fail was breaking up with my gf.

that's going to suck for a while


Quote by leg end
Well, not really haha!