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green
2 33%
blue
0 0%
red
3 50%
purple
1 17%
Voters: 6.
#1
Awaytowarmtheides'ofwinter

Two prefoundpostloss shells
spiral succinctly around a fire,
resting less like fraudulent binds
or ligatures entwined,
more alluding to their weeping willow postures
and post-laud remarks by-
lateral eyes.
With a backbone to behold
them upright they hold each other
yet look away...
Still delusional from
thoughts carried within psalms, like
viral whispers past -
from one mourner to another;
anechoic and anarthric.

Beckoned at last-
words with tempered tongues
divide between grinding teeth,
newly fondled arteries mark
switches in mood.
Cold toes and wake eyes
seek the breaking of binds
as they covertly converse
with psalters' palm pressed - against each other,
alighting match-book fairy-tales and ember thoughts
in remembrance of two secular
shells lying succinctly beside the blaze...
silently ecstatic,
their souls..
all souls are postlossprefound;
co-occupied in sinders -
befit to linger
like wicker whispers cast
into the pyre
to stoke the flame
for just an hour more.



Untitled

The snow begins to fall
and all the engines stall

fuck


I'll Be Keeping Myself Warm This Winter

This motel is an open wound,
a nest of dual solitude.
Another month would free this harbour,
if another month would come so soon.

An escape from winter's pacifists
that bait you up, then lure you in.
This calls for a celebration.
A deck of cards, a bottle of gin.

Seeping through these paper walls,
room 6 has known my secret all along.
I'm painting portraits of myself
with crosshairs over open palms.

I'm crawling in my vanity.
I'm calling it democracy.
I speak of "luck" in theory,
while knocking boots with fantasy.

The flies on the wall,
they all sing a new hymn
for every trip that I've taken
down memory lane.
And they shed a fresh tear
for each breathe that it takes
for me to warm to the embrace
of another vestal's chastity.



Roadside Funeral

Last year around this time,
A guy froze to death
Face down in a snowbank
Basking in the winter wonderland.
Those kind of memories can't melt away
Like the brownish white slurry
Of roadside slush.
It's so full of salt,
I wonder how it tasted
That final frigid meal,
Laced with cruel season
ings.
Last edited by bassbeat77 at Jan 27, 2008,
#2
If Untitled has a smidge more substance I'd have voted for it. Purple it is.
Ain't Nuthin' But a UG Thang: Generic member of the UG Hip Hop/Guitar Music Equality Illuminati

Quote by mydarkesthour

It seems like UG is full of those Caveman Metalheads

Quote by mydarkesthour
I meant caveman as in long haired....


#3
I'm surprised my piece even got a vote last round... let alone enough to put it through.
Promises meant a lot back then.
#4
No offense, but how can anyone vote for a piece that starts with "this motel is an open wound?"
Ain't Nuthin' But a UG Thang: Generic member of the UG Hip Hop/Guitar Music Equality Illuminati

Quote by mydarkesthour

It seems like UG is full of those Caveman Metalheads

Quote by mydarkesthour
I meant caveman as in long haired....


#5
i voted green. i'm bemused that it hadn't been voted for previously.

blue had no substance. at all. its just, nothing.

pumpkins_rule was spot on about red.

purple's opening two lines were just... i couldn't get past them. honestly. i skimmed the rest. i couldnt bear to read any more because they were just so dull and and empty in their colloquial inspecificity.

sorry.
my name is matt. you can call me that if you like.
#6
Eh I didn't vote for green because I felt the diction wasn't well thought-out. Otherwise it was good, good ideas.
Ain't Nuthin' But a UG Thang: Generic member of the UG Hip Hop/Guitar Music Equality Illuminati

Quote by mydarkesthour

It seems like UG is full of those Caveman Metalheads

Quote by mydarkesthour
I meant caveman as in long haired....


#7
Quote by pumpkins_rule
No offense, but how can anyone vote for a piece that starts with "this motel is an open wound?"



Should have used "Once upon a time..."
#8
^Well I'm just saying that when the opening line of a poem braces the reader for plenty of angst its not a good thing.
Ain't Nuthin' But a UG Thang: Generic member of the UG Hip Hop/Guitar Music Equality Illuminati

Quote by mydarkesthour

It seems like UG is full of those Caveman Metalheads

Quote by mydarkesthour
I meant caveman as in long haired....


#10
^Since this is a Super Comp. I could just send the top piece from each group through, and then I won't have to worry about the tiebreaker for group B either. I think that's what I'll do.
#11
I can see what it looks like, but in such a large comp I think it should be a bit longer. To knock out 6 pieces in one round is a bit extreme, dunno.
Filth, pure filth... That's what you are.
#12
Okay, yeah I was kind of wondering about that. I guess we can do another round. Three go through from each then.