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1 17%
5 83%
Voters: 6.
sorry this took so long...semester just started and i've been very busy.

Timothy Leary

The vision
The airborne who rest
High above the omnipotent hazing of
Contemporary life
No swinging through the
Run-down bars
The side of the road where dreamers fly
To achieve the epitome of
Life illuminated by flashing lights
The true dreamer must
Amass friends, acquaintances, enemies
And develop the dream of
Convincing the human spirits, whose density is unparalleled
To give in
And to give up life on the ground
Wrapped together
Warped by impossible consciousness
An incomplete existence
Shaking as the mind shatters
These pillars
The foundations upon which
We support our entire existence
Timothy Leary, are these
Your clearest illusions?
Do they glide across the inconclusiveness of being
As if to say:
This stone and this earth,
Together they mean nothing
To me?


A majestic mountain of wheaten rings;
Rubies, sapphires, and emeralds
rising through the milkly heavens
of the bowl.

Like all great things, though,
time slowly takes it's toll.
The hues weep from the rings,
swirling wisps turning once-pure milk
to a subdued, opaque pastel,
and deteriorate a once grand peak
to a mottled, mushy mess.

Partscaster/Tele into a bunch of pedals, a Maz 18 head, and a Z Best cab.
can we get at least, like...three votes?

/end bump.

Partscaster/Tele into a bunch of pedals, a Maz 18 head, and a Z Best cab.
First one has no scope, so much abstraction and nothing to ground it to, I couldn't finish it. Also, the line breaks were unnatural.

Second one is so wordy and obvious and pretentious that it just doesn't matter. If you're describing something with a small scope then at least make it something interesting and work on the flow... actually the trans-stazaic rhyme was well done so kudos. But really, it just seemed forced, like someone trying to philisophical in a way no one would ever believe that they are actually philisophical.

Neither... But if I had to choose: red
2nd one reminds me of lucky charms
if you get rid of the first line.
It gets my vote
Promises meant a lot back then.