#1
this song

is symphonic power metal

press F5 for lyrics people

read them while it plays

this might be forever a w.i.p.

i think im done writing power metal for awhile

ive gottten really into like metalcore recently
and everything i write i feel ive written it before

so i mgiht finish this soon [depends on wheter or not i watch lotr tonight]

or i might not

but tell me what you think

ALSO
IF YOU HEAR SOMETHING IN YOUR HEAD THAT SOUNDS LIKE IT COULD GO NEXT
WRITE IT AND POST IT, ILL GLADY APPRECIATE IT

LYRICS FOR MIDI VERSION
.....from heaven the pladadins marched forth
a holy war hath left the land in peril and scarred
the earth for years to come
but it was on this day the evil that jath been wroght
be undone a land torn apart by misery and turmoil
shall with unnwithering energy and courage rise
up and rip asunder the evil that hath cursed their
lives and fouled their kind green country
the land of ynvierta with their best and worst
youngest and oldest wilingest and resialliant
courages and cowardly banded together
for it was the time that the evil become nigh
but a thing of the past and its power
will forth be resided to let teh green grasses grow
the skys appear blue the creatures frolic in the wilderness
and the residents live without fear
it was teh last march of the paladins.....


edit: updated
redid some of intro

added verse and prechorus
Attachments:
last march.zip
Last edited by envoykrawkwar7 at Jan 30, 2008,
#2
w_w i'm sorry but that was REALLY boring until you get like 2 something minutes in, same thing over....and over.....and over.... @_@

you need to have more variety. but once it got going it was intense. maybe go a little bit easier on the pinch harmonics (were they? hard to tell in midi)
and definately do more with the intro.

i'd say around 5-6/10 at the moment
#3
It was good love the synths your one of those guys who listens and writes just about anything right lol. Cause I've seen marches and symphonic so i guess this is a nice additon to what you have accomplished. So far it sounds great, Gj thnx for the crit.
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#4
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w_w i'm sorry but that was REALLY boring until you get like 2 something minutes in, same thing over....and over.....and over.... @_@

you need to have more variety. but once it got going it was intense. maybe go a little bit easier on the pinch harmonics (were they? hard to tell in midi)
and definately do more with the intro.

i'd say around 5-6/10 at the moment



there was only like 2 pinch harmonics 0_0

and it helps wiht the lyrics [just posted tehm so =p]

and im thinking of adding a brass track to the rest of the intro i just cant get it to sound right to me
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#5
i guess you're right o_o"


i'm not on the ball today.

i'll try listening again with the lyrics
#6
Quote by p!r4Te
i guess you're right o_o"


i'm not on the ball today.

i'll try listening again with the lyrics


its a wednesday
no ones on it
[theyre all on crack XD]

but its basically a big intro that would fit into an epic movie [think lord of the rings]
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#7
nice lyrics, I love the subject matter. I suggest building into the song earlier, like having the drums build up just as the guitar work builds up. Find a melody and a theme you want to convey throughout the song. Good stuff.
#8
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nice lyrics, I love the subject matter. I suggest building into the song earlier, like having the drums build up just as the guitar work builds up. Find a melody and a theme you want to convey throughout the song. Good stuff.

oh perfect idea, timpani cuts out too early i though so il have it go from one to the otherr under that 6 bar transition

thank you

[="D im not much of a lyric writer so thanks for that too"]
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#9
well i didn't enjoy this. its really boring and kinda cheesy. make those happy riffs metal.

btw i hate power metal so don't take it personally.
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#11
That wasnt too bad, iv heard worse.Some things i picked up on though

-The drums were boring and all the same pretty much through out, why do you keep changin the snare hit? it kinda got annoying

-Some of the lead notes were slightly out of time, but like a fraction, every couple of bars some notes were fraction out.

-Intro was good, i liked the idea and how you tried to develop it, but i dont think its epic enough for the song title, it was a bit repetitive after a while.

-Bar 70, try putting a bit of vibrato on the harmonic, will make it sound better. Same with bar 78, vibrato man!

-end of bar 76, that bend wasnt in key, try bending it by a semitone, im assuming your wanting to bend it to the 5th fret?

-bar 99, 6th fret not in key im afraid

-bar 106 plus, for some reason the strings and guitar didnt quite match up chord wise

Overall, i think it would make a good power metal song with the lyrics(which you have i saw) and fix it up a bit.Atm i dont particually like it.I like the ideas, just not the way you developed them.

7/10

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