#1
Please crit this song, for its up to you all if it should stay on the final outcome or be redone:

Here, asleep on the floor
Your time has now come
To choose which path to take
Its up to you what to make
Turning away, as a coward would do
Thinking that theres nothing to prove
He promised through sickness and health
Theres only one person left to call

Friends are seeing the worse in you
Hoping that he would come back to you
He acted like a boy
Now he needs to grow up and become a man
Like a baby, He whined and cried
Victims will pay eventually

I've got nothing left to prove
Pray for me my mother
I've got nothing left to prove

The awnser is right there
Just stare at the blade
Your apologies cant write you out this time
Tonight, you'll find it right
In the time of drinking, dont die
Oh my, dont be a fool
Dont try anymore

Here, in the hole in your heart
Just dont let them be a part
You had told this to him
A hole that was caused by pain
They had told you right again

Friends are seeing the worse in you
Hoping that he would come back to you
He acted like a boy
Now he needs to grow up and become a man
Like a baby, He whined and cried
Victims will pay eventually

I've got nothing left to prove
PRay for me my mother
I've got nothing left to prove

The awnser is right there
Just stare at the blade
Your apologies cant write you out this time
Tonight, you'll find it right
In the time of drinking, dont die
Young fool

Dear Crystalina, Go catch the man that runs
My how he runs
Your frightend of him leaving you
Truly gone awy from you
Go fetch the blade

The awnser is right there
Just stare at the blade
Your apologies cant write you out this time
Tonight, you'll find it right
In the time of drinking, dont die
Young fool

Not anymore, dont cry hun
Not anymore, dont cry hun
Not anymore, dont cry hun
Now sink to the bottom, just slide the knife

Dont cry hun
Not anymore, dont cry
He's alright, hun
#2
...wow...now thats a long song! shorten it up or you'll make people fall asleep...no offence...good song, too long...

Keep writting

Kom23