#1

The world has turned its back on me
for a little bit
so I'm
sat here at my computer
waiting for it to finish
sucking out my soul
through my fingertips.
Perhaps it's like sex and
my essence is creamy white,
invading the machinery
through its many orifices.
Perhaps I should buck my hips and
shake in climax,
sat here in my boredom
waiting for it to finish.
Instead I carry on typing
my shitty poems
erupting like children
from the womb.




love is a dog from hell.



#3
haha i like it man.
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#4

Cheers guys! Bit different to the last few, don't think it mentions drinking at all...




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#5
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The world has turned its back on me

i hate this as a first line. it's so 'oh, pity me, i'm so sad.' i think you can do better

for a little bit
so I'm
sat here at my computer

i think 'sitting' would work better than 'sat here' but that may just be a personal thing. i really just don't like the way 'i'm sat' sounds.

waiting for it to finish
sucking out my soul
through my fingertips.
Perhaps it's like sex and
my essence is creamy white,
invading the machinery
through its many orifices.
Perhaps I should buck my hips and

i don't like the repetition of perhaps. i can be a fan of repetition, but only repeating the word twice makes it kind of unclear as to whether you meant to do it.

shake in climax,
sat here in my boredom
waiting for it to finish.
Instead I carry on typing
my shitty poems
erupting like children
from the womb.



i really liked this. those few things i pointed out are really all i can think to say about it. good stuff.
when birds flap their wings do the make believe they're really arms?
#7

I meant the repetition. And the first line was more improtant if you put it in context with the whole because it relates to the boredom.

Cheers guys





love is a dog from hell.