#1
Sorry i had to make a thread againg because some weasly little cocksucker reported me for having 3 songs rather than 2... sorry i didnt know that rule i could have just been asked to remove one but hey...

anyhoo thats my rant over with and here are a couple of songs i wrote... im an extreme novice and just want a little feedback...

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with commintments which i cant commit to
i have to find the time to think
sitting around getting nothing done
but knowing it all, but how to make things right
no matter how much i want you here with me
it isnt going to happen as you aint got the patience
and i dont have the time
but i would burn this town down so you could see me
come to me and be mine

I want to find the time so i can see you
grabbing all the time i have to be with you
dont wanna forget how we are now
or to forget how your voice sounds
im sure i heard you say that you loved me
but misery loves my company

id pay aything for your thoughts
just to know where i stand
but with my shy confusion
i would never have the right words to hand
looking for the perfect way to say the simple things
while big issues are put aside
so as i have something to worry about later

I want to find the time so i can see you
grabbing all the time i have to be with you
dont wanna forget how we are now
or to forget how your voice sounds
im sure i heard you say that you loved me
but misery loves my company

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there once was love but now its past
i loved how you were but now how you are
you lost your spark and all fell down
all had died and now your alone
dont know why you let it all fall down
all was great and now has gone
dont know why you let it all fall down
falling in and out and nothing could be done
dont know why you let it all fall down
i atleast feel safe knowing you wasnt the one

the was no love there all had faded away
became so hard we wouldnt try for another day
we fell apart and now we can move on
you keep falling down im going to continue to move on

what was there is now the past
dont know why you let it all fall down
becoming what we had feared and all to fast
dont know why you let it all fall down
with how things got i only hope im the last

did you even care for me
i really hope you had
but all you did was for you
and you gave me all that was bad
but the time has gone never to return
a long distant memory or a love which crashed and burnt
#4
wow there are so many rules on here ... kinda kills the point of it.. rather than a forum its more of a police state...lol...

i cant say i mind this getting closed... im bored of this place already...lol

but thanks guys for being cool
#7
It's not that hard to follow someones advice is it?

I mean the rules are in place for a reason, it's not just to annoy you. Perhaps a few people here like to inject some professionalism into the forum, you know, take themselves seriously too.

Actually we're not anal, you're just stupid and self important. Read the few rules, adhere to them and get something out of this forum, or leave. Your choice.
Filth, pure filth... That's what you are.