#1
with commintments which i cant commit to
i have to find the time to think
sitting around getting nothing done
but knowing it all, but how to make things right
no matter how much i want you here with me
it isnt going to happen as you aint got the patience
and i dont have the time
but i would burn this town down so you could see me
come to me and be mine

I want to find the time so i can see you
grabbing all the time i have to be with you
dont wanna forget how we are now
or to forget how your voice sounds
im sure i heard you say that you loved me
but misery loves my company

id pay aything for your thoughts
just to know where i stand
but with my shy confusion
i would never have the right words to hand
looking for the perfect way to say the simple things
while big issues are put aside
so as i have something to worry about later

I want to find the time so i can see you
grabbing all the time i have to be with you
dont wanna forget how we are now
or to forget how your voice sounds
im sure i heard you say that you loved me
but misery loves my company


feedback appreciated....
Last edited by FallOutBoy07 at Feb 5, 2008,
#2
I threw up a little when i read your title.

Reading through this all i find is one cliché after another, nothing new, nothing original, nothing poetic.

I'm sure it means something to you, so i'm sorry to rag so hard on it, it just did nothing for me whatsoever.

Try imagery, try expanding your vocabulary, try to not be so blunt, try to avoid cliché.