#1
I live in the subconscious
I dwell in the unreal,
I never imagined all I could feel.
Love life, for I reside in the weird,
In the end we will be revered.

I live in the strange.
One hand clapping in my brain,
What to think, have I gone insane?
The world on axis as a pendulum,
Others just say I’m either dumb or numb.

I live in the bizarre.
The cosmos constantly gyrating,
But for the people I am elating.
Look to the deep purple eye, quite odd.
Love and life lost, so I eat the pod.

I live in the inconceivable.
Look to the future, my only friend,
Time and thought I transcend.
Everyday is as long as a life age,
In a castle beyond time, I consult the sage.

Descend with him under the sea.
Where you can still see the stars,
Though the noble taint still scars.
Through the garden to the other side,
He is the eternal and mystic guide.

Hidden in the land is the enigma,
A veiled secret, kept for ages.
There great book with golden pages.
A secret of Delphi, shrouded and arcane,
In the tome all knowledge is attained.

You must not forsake the vow.
If you delve into the illustrious pages,
You will invoke the wrath of the sages.
End of it all, you sink in quicksand,
But everything you now understand.

Phenomena will forever last,
You must forget the past.
You can no longer return,
Stay if sensation you yearn.

Crit4Crit
Thank you all for your time and help.
Peace, Love, Rhythm
Last edited by Ramblin'_Man at Feb 6, 2008,
#2
Quote by Ramblin'_Man
I live in the subconscious
I dwell in the unreal,
I never imagined all I could feel.
Love life, for I reside in the weird, kinda weird line
In the end we will be revered.

I live in the strange.
One hand clapping in my brain,
What to think, have I gone insane?
The world on axis as a pendulum,
Others just say I’m either dumb or numb.

I live in the bizarre.
The cosmos constantly gyrating, i dont know what that means but it sounds good
But for the people I am elating.
Look to the deep purple eye, quite odd.
Love and life lost, so I eat the pod.

I live in the inconceivable.
Look to the future, my only friend,
Time and thought I transcend.
Everyday is as long as a life age,
In a castle beyond time, I consult the sage.

Descend with him under the sea.
Where you can still see the stars,
Though the noble taint still scars.
Through the garden to the other side,
He is the eternal and mystic guide.

Hidden in the land is the enigma,
A veiled secret, kept for ages.
There great book with golden pages.
A secret of Delphi, shrouded and arcane,
In the tome all knowledge is attained.

You must not forsake the vow.
If you delve into the illustrious pages,
You will invoke the wrath of the sages.
End of it all, you sink in quicksand,
But everything you now understand.

Phenomena will forever last,
You must forget the past.
You can no longer return,
Stay if sensation you yearn.

Crit4Crit
Thank you all for your time and help.
Peace, Love, Rhythm



well it was weird first 3 stanzas but the rest of the stanzas seemed to flow more fluidly. it was good. but i personally think the first three stanzas should be edited
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