#1
I grasped and pulled on the worn cord,
friction between my finger tips and the
wearied fibres enabled the drapes to
ceremoniously begin to rise. Allowing
both the hospitable gleaming panes and
the piercing unforgiving morning light
to enter my vision. This kind of light
meant you must react quickly, raise a
hand and rest it upon your brow, cast
a feeble shadow, enough to shield your
precious retinas from certain over
load. We must always always protect
our delicate spherical eyes.

Our eyes are ok, so we shift our feet
scuff them a little on the faux marble
floor and depress the lever on the vast
chromed toaster, the intense heat could
whip up breakfast in no time, four slices,
no less would be adequate. Garnished with
a butter substitute, no doubt the cheapest
offering from a local supermarket, but no
matter, this was of little concern, the
stellar choice of blackberry jam would
easily mask this budget choice, of course
no expense would be spared here. No expense
is spared where it really matters, is it?

06/02/08 mw
#2
i dont know waht to say but i think that was very good. weird rythm
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#3
Quote by bowl of oranges
I grasped and pulled on the worn cord,
friction between my finger tips and the
wearied fibres enabled the drapes to
ceremoniously begin to rise. Allowing
both the hospitable gleaming panes and
the piercing unforgiving morning light
to enter my vision. This kind of light
meant you must react quickly, raise a
hand and rest it upon your brow, cast
a feeble shadow, enough to shield your
precious retinas from certain over
load. We must always always protect
our delicate spherical eyes.
Beautifully descriptive, i really like this part

Our eyes are ok, so we shift our feet
scuff them a little on the faux marble
floor and depress the lever on the vast
chromed toaster, the intense heat could
whip up breakfast in no time, four slices,
no less would be adequate. Garnished with
a butter substitute, no doubt the cheapest
offering from a local supermarket, but no
matter, this was of little concern, the
stellar choice of blackberry jam would
easily mask this budget choice, of course
no expense would be spared here. No expense
is spared where it really matters, is it?
Again, nice usage of words, but the rhythm is odd, or is it spaced to fit, and not supposed to read exactly how written here?
06/02/08 mw

Cant help much, but nice job
i need to hear some sounds that recognize the pain in me, yeah.