#1
That's What You Call It? Life?

by Steve

what little freedom i had
gone forever
shackles more tightly bound
expected perfection
from the horribly flawed
inhuman treatment
for simple human acts
living hypocrisy
from yesterday's failures
perfecting their sorry lives
through my miserable existence
where do you get the right
to impose your darkened light
and destroy for not seeing
through the darkness it creates

existence is permeated
by your mental assaults
and the unkown havoc you wreak
slaughtering the weak
week by week
completely oblivious
to their torture
you naively call life

if you don't want to hurt me
just tell me the truth
than having your little slaves
reenact if for me
not having the decency
to relay it to my face
what coward you are
you don't care about
the pain it inflicts
just to afraid to cause
in case its blamed on you
the misery that follows
you selfish wench
even believing yourself
more susceptible to you
than i will ever be

existence is permeated
by your mental assaults
and the unkown havoc you wreak
slaughtering the weak
week by week
completely oblivious
to their torture
you naively call life

hell, when it goes wrong, its all at once
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#2
i dunno about this one....i dont feel it at all ive read it over mad times, ill give you props for your word variety though im just not feeling it
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#3
kinda corny and redundant, which takes away from the morbidity it's trying to convey.

these parts kinda confused me/took away from the song the most

where do you get the right
to impose your darkened light
and destroy for not seeing
through the darkness it creates



if you don't want to hurt me
just tell me the truth
than having your little slaves
reenact if for me



but this one's good

and the unknown havoc you wreak
slaughtering the weak
week by week
#4
the rhyme scheme? it only ryhmes like 5 times!!??!?

make the flow better, yeah, didn't feel it. Sorry. A respectable try though. Keep it up.

Not tryin' to be mean, just honest