#1
crit4crit

It’s so cold in here
It’s so dark in here
And I need your touch
It’s so cold in here
It’s so dark in here
Won’t you open me up

Drown me in the water
If I should ever run out
‘Cause they’ll never let us be
‘Til the king takes back his crown

It’s so hot in here
It’s so dark in here
And the noise won’t stop
It’s so hot in here
It’s so dark in here
I’m the last one you got

Drown me in the water
If I should ever run out
‘Cause they’ll never let us be
‘Til the king takes back his crown

Well, I could your king
But I’ll be your jester
And leave you laughing
Tired of hearing you cry
I swear to you my queen
We’ll make it through tonight
#2
It’s so cold in here
It’s so dark in here
And I need your touch
I like this opening, sets the scene pretty well.
It’s so cold in here
It’s so dark in here
Won’t you open me up
Dunno bout this, open you how?? Bit unclear. I like the repitition of the opening lines but a better last line could be used

Drown me in the water
If I should ever run out
‘Cause they’ll never let us be
‘Til the king takes back his crown
I like this, presumebly it's the chorus. You could leave out the 'the' before water i think, and I'd consider changing the 'be' to something more specific.

It’s so hot in here
It’s so dark in here
And the noise won’t stop
Again, i like this, but maybe you could include something either before or after to explain this change of temperature. I don't really follow what has happened...
It’s so hot in here
It’s so dark in here
I’m the last one you got
"You've" instead of "you" would bring the language register up a few notches, unless you're not going for that. My only suggestion here.

Drown me in the water
If I should ever run out
‘Cause they’ll never let us be
‘Til the king takes back his crown

Well, I could your king
But I’ll be your jester
And leave you laughing
Tired of hearing you cry
I swear to you my queen
We’ll make it through tonight
I'd consider changeing the last line, for the simple reason that it is a cliche. Other than that, it's good.

-I hope I wasn't too critical, and my overall response is that I like it but it is unclear what is happening in the middle.-

C4C??

(MIne is also a bit ambiguous, admittedly)
I was happy in the haze of a drunken hour

But heaven knows I'm miserable now

I was looking for a job and then I found a job

But heaven knows I'm miserable now