#1
the rock collapse is cracking down, and you are her first born, i understand
you get away with everything,
make your way into my trap,
watch out, i'm coming back.

i'm sick of standing alone, i'm standing up, you can leave home
you hate me anyways
you hate me anyways
i'm sick of being wrong, i'm sick of growing up, you can leave home
you hate me anyways
you hate me anyways

watch her pack her things, she'll leave you here to cry,
she's selfish as it comes, she gets away with everything

i'm sick of stading alone, i'm sick of staying home, you can leave now and never return
you hate me anyways
you hate me anyways
i'm sick of being gone, i'm sick of going wrong, you can leave now and never return
you hate me anyways
you hate me anyways

watch the tears roll down your eyes, as your first born leaves, nose high
you hate me anyways
you hate me anyways
you sick minded bitch
you hate me anyways
you hate me anyways
#3
haha nice i love songs with emotion and thats whta i feel in your song, good pure emotion,
thats for the crit on my song
Keep up the work i'll keep looking to see if you post more
#4
its way too repetitive. thats really all i can say about this one. not enough lines to crit. you must have been really crazy about whoever broke up with you. it looks like you wrote this to a highschool girlfriend that broke your heart. needs some more lines that arent exactly the same.

i know im probably asking this in vain after what i just said, but crit mine? its called oblivion. just search it. srry about the negative crit, but that's what i think.