#1
You sell yourself far too short, my dear
I still wake up every day and wonder
How in this beautiful world I got so lucky

I lack the skill with the english language
To say what I want to say
And I'd write this in latin
If I thought I could do any better

But no matter, I don't need words
All I need is one embrace
One chance
To tell you everything



I wrote this in the past fifteen minutes or so. It's really nothing like what I usually write, I just had to get it out of me. And no, it's not supposed to rhyme. Let me know what you think. I'll be happy to crit yours if you leave me a link.
#2
Quote by captain_jack
You sell yourself far too short, my dear
I still wake up every day and wonder
How in this beautiful world I got so lucky

I lack the skill with the english language
To say what I want to say
And I'd write this in latin
If I thought I could do any better

But no matter, I don't need words
All I need is one embrace
One chance
To tell you everything



I wrote this in the past fifteen minutes or so. It's really nothing like what I usually write, I just had to get it out of me. And no, it's not supposed to rhyme. Let me know what you think. I'll be happy to crit yours if you leave me a link.



I think the words are beautiful, but the idea itself is a little cliche to me. Don't take that badly- this is already a really nice piece, and it communicates its idea very well, I've just seen it before. There's not many NEW ideas here. I mean, different people are surrounded by different ideas, so I can't really get on you for anything.
I like it!


Something of mine...
So good to see you once again.
I thought that you were hiding.
And you thought that I had run away.
Chasing the tail of dogma.
I opened my eye and there we were .