#1
Short song Working on guitars tonight.... hope you like


I lay dieing
I lost myself in my thoughts
Are you here?
Do you remember me?
Cause I think I might need you
While I'm here screaming
Help stop the bleeding

[Chorus::]
Return me back
Cause I know I'm too lost here
See me go dry out of words
I feel the grave in my head
I cry out and see if anyone can hear
Cause when you feel like a super hero
You need someone to save


I try so hard not to think of you
Cause there is so much I can't erase
I can't see my life going a good way
So to ease the pain of life

[Chorus]
#2
Quote by *Thundernation*
Short song Working on guitars tonight.... hope you like


I lay dieing
I lost myself in my thoughts
Are you here?
Do you remember me?
Cause I think I might need you
While I'm here screaming
Help stop the bleeding

Ur Intro IS weak I say Try to change it a little


[Chorus::]
Return me back
Cause I know I'm too lost here
See me go dry out of words
I feel the grave in my head
I cry out and see if anyone can hear
Cause when you feel like a super hero
You need someone to save


I like the chorus, clever choice of words


I try so hard not to think of you
Cause there is so much I can't erase
I can't see my life going a good way
So to ease the pain of life

[Chorus]


Basically u have a good chorus but the verses are weak I mean cliche words try to change some of the Words and Good luck