#1
i wrote this song a while ago and it's the first song i ever wrote. i think it's pretty good but suggestions are welcome

School Daze

It’s Monday morning, eight a.m.
Time for school to begin
Rubbin’ your eyes and shakin’ your head
Just wishin’ you were home in bed
Been the same routine for the past three months
But I ain’t gotten better yet
Maybe soon it won’t be so bad
But I wouldn’t take that bet

Chorus
School daze, they drag on and on
Startin’ up at the break of dawn
Yeah school daze keep draggin’ on
Dozin’ off through the afternoon
School daze, they ain’t no use
It’s just another name for child abuse

School bell rings, it’s time for class
The time for fun is past
You’re walkin’ down the hall, takin’ it slow
Thinkin’ school really blows
As soon as you walk in the door
The boredom gets more and more
Ya sit in your desk, head heavy
Dreamin’ of your bed at home
You start do doze in your desk
Listening to the teacher’s monotone

Chorus
School daze, they drag on and on
Startin’ up at the break of dawn
Yeah school daze keep draggin’ on
Dozin’ off through the afternoon
School daze, they ain’t no use
It’s just another name for child abuse

After five hours being locked up like a con
Thirty minutes and you’ll be gone
But for now you gotta sit and make due
With the teacher preachin’ to you
You pick up your pen and pretend to write
But your thoughts are on tonight
You got plans with your girlfriend
An’ your daydreaming till the end
The bell rings, time to go home
But you’ll be back again soon
Chorus
School daze, they drag on and on
Startin’ up at the break of dawn
Yeah school daze keep draggin’ on
Dozin’ off through the afternoon
School daze, they ain’t no use
It’s just another name for child abuse

5,4,3,2,1 SCHOOL’S OUT
#2
Too much unneeded rhyming, you don't need to rhyme and most of the time it just comes out extremely forced. It feels like you wrote it in a short amount of time, the lines don't really show any creative thought.

Learn to use metaphors and imagery. Use a thesaurus and get used to more words and incorporate them in your writing.