#1
Verse 1
Cant seem to shake the feeling
that every door that opens
is the wrong one for me
Never got used to you leaving
and watching those double doors closing
took me all this time to finally see
that i never got used to missing you

Chorus
I never got back on track
and I never gave you up
Forgot to forget about you
and maybe thats one problem to add to the stack
and you hating me may be just my luck
Thats the one thing I forgot to do
Forget

Verse 2
Never saw these dry eyes coming
seeing you smile
right through me
Never thought they wouldnt be stopping
for such a long while
its like my heart forgot to bleed

Bridge
Tried to get me to tag along
and Thats not why i asked you back
to be your friend
I never was that powerful or strong
and thats a quality I never thought i lacked
I guess you expected to me to just live
But thats not how i live

Chorus

(fades on the word forget)
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Last edited by RageGarden at Feb 13, 2008,
#2
Thats the one thing to forgot to do
Forget
change the first "to" to "I". Im sure that was just a typo. Its a great song, tons of meaning. Thx for critting mine by the way. This song is really good. Easy to relate to. I liked it a lot. Keep up the good work.
#3
Quote by RageGarden
Verse 1
Cant seem to shake the feeling
that every door that opens
is the wrong one for me
Never got used to you leaving
and watching those double doors closing
took me all this time to finally see
that i never, got used to, missing you

I really like this verse, nothing too cliche, yeah maybe the last line but it fits very well. on the last line I think there might have to be a few commas like where I put them but that was only the way I imagined this being sung.

Chorus
I never got back on track
and I never gave you up
Forgot to forget about you
and maybe thats one problem to add to the stack
and you hating me may be just my luck
Thats the one thing to forgot to do
Forget

Nice wording, I would have to hear it being sung to really have the sense of flow, because the music I had in mind with the first verse I can't really get to flow into the chorus.

Verse 2
Never saw these dry eyes coming
seeing you smile
right through me
Never thought they wouldnt be stopping
for such a long while
its like my heart forgot to bleed

very nice, flows very well, but the last line doesn't bode well with me.

Bridge
Tried to get me to tag along
and Thats not why i asked you back
to be your friend
I never was that powerful or strong
and thats a quality I never thought i lacked
I guess you expected to me to just live
But thats not how i live

Load and loads of meaning behind this, very easy to relate to, but different wording is necessary, the second line isn't that great. Try not to end two lines with live one after the other. You could even just take the last line out.

Chorus

(fades on the word forget)



Overall a very nice song. What would the genre be? Like was said it was very easy to relate to. Good job.


if you wouldn't mind criting mine.
its in my sig under
"Shadows In A Dark Room"
#4
Thank you
I cant really find a good set of music for it but im working on it
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