#1
Here's a new one I've been working on.
Let me know what you guys think about it.


Empty cans line the walls
Like the fall of Berlin
Smoke a Cigarette
Write yourself a death threat

You must have had your hands
Full with that one
No cameras on the rollercoaster

Don't wanna catch the derail
And smooth sail
Into the concrete

But if everything were backward
I might be alright
But if you just read the fine print
We all die anyway

Light another cigarette
Is there anything that's worth living for?
Anymore
We'll have to find out

Open wide, invite in the intruder
Scream until your ****ing lungs collapse

I'll spend my days wishing I could remember
Everything I've known
I'll spend this day wishing I could take
The words right out of your mouth.


But if everything were backward
I might be alright
But if you just read the fine print
We all die anyway


I'll spend my days (X8)
I'll spend my days wishing I could remember

That if everything were backward
I might be alright
But if you just read the fine print
We all die anyway


This
Is
A
Great
Place
To
Call
Home
#2
dude thats a song title by bon jovi off of have a nice day
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RIP Charles Michael "Chuck" Schuldiner THE FATHER OF DEATH METAL
GOD HATES US ALL-SLAYER
#5
Its ok
seems upbeat
or at least thats the way I imagine it to be
seems kind of... forced almost
maybe im wrong
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#6
Its ok about the title. not too hard to change. Just make it like "one more cigarette" or something. decent song. little emo, but i liked it. what kind of style is this song? death metal? screamo? seems like it would be. its a good song though. tons of meaning.

crit mine? its called oblivion.