#1
something a little wierd but new, and its a new style to me... check it... :-)

smoke burns my mind and im spinning round and round, its mixed up.
i think its burning up my heart
leave me alone, im not ready to go home, its mixed up.
i want nothing to go wrong

but i know this retro girl will save me
she will save me
with her pretty eyes
crazy things
got to love those skinny jeans
happy hearts
saddened frown
shes what spins me round and round

lights burn my eyes, as im running round this town, its mixed up
stuck in the middle of this crowd
see her with her gang, just like hanging round the park, its mixed up
now stole away my heart

but i know this retro girl will save me
she will save me
with her pretty eyes
crazy things
got to love those skinny jeans
happy hearts
saddened frown
shes what spins me round and round
Light touch my hand, in a dream of Golden Skans, from now on.
You can forget our future plans.
Last edited by Gizmo69 at Feb 12, 2008,
#2
Sounds a little like old school rock and roll to me, at least some parts. I like it, and I think it can be good.
I'm the same as I was when I was six years old
And oh my god I feel so damn old
I don't really feel anything
#3
I love the chorus and think it says it all, exactly what a chorus should. I like how the verses are a round "smoke burning/ lights burning my eyes' etc. but maybe elaborate on how she makes you feel some more..
#4
i think its a really good song. short, sweet, and to the point. the chorus is my favorite part. its really good. love the title, idea, and the lyrics. all in all just a great song. crit mine? its called oblivion.
#6
wow.. thanks people... i just have to work out some music for it now.. i wasnt sure the song was any good though so thanks... :-)
Light touch my hand, in a dream of Golden Skans, from now on.
You can forget our future plans.