#1
this is my first attempt at writing lyrics, so go all out on everything thats wrong. i need to know what to improve. its kinda about what my life's been like recently, and i only have the first verse and chorus, so here goes:

Verse 1:
I stood on one side of the door,
but I couldn't see the other side.
Seemed like I'd been there before,
I guess then just wasn't my time

A life held in the balance,
my heart's sound's static,
the world froze all around me
No room for mistakes,

Chorus:
The life, in the room,
was gone, or so it seemed,
the people all around me,
just too far, out of reach.

I guess, sometimes,
you need, something to hold
when everything goes wrong
to help you, make it right.
Call me Jack.
All that you love...
...you must love now.
My Gear:
PRS Custom 24
Standard MIM Tele
Larrivée LV-09E
Rivera Clubster 45 112 Combo Tube
Boss ME-20 Multi-effects pedal
Boss OC-3 Super octave pedal
My own home-made octave-up pedal
#2
I´m not very good at writting myself but I think it´s really good, I really liked it. I think you´re expressing a trapped and pressured feeling and also advising to find the good aspects of a bad situation, whatever they might be. I really hope I get to read the full version soon. continue writting I think you have a lot of pottencial.