#1
I feel like i'm caught in the eye of a storm
There's nobdy here but me
Wind whippnig around and aorund
Clenching my fists
Holding my heart
I'm anticipated, coz it feels like
Yeaa it feels like the eye of a storm

I'll pretend i've gone and left you alone
When really i'll be waiting for you to phone
Though throughout the wait
I know it's too late
You've nothing left to say
But i can't give up and walk away
That's not me

I feel like i'm caught in the eye of a storm
There's nobdy here but me
Wind whippnig around and aorund
Clenching my fists
Holding my heart
I'm anticipated, coz it feels like
Yeaa it feels like the eye of a storm

But I can't give up and walk away
That's not me.

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#3
hey i tried to post using a quote twice but it kept erroring so ill just tell you sorry.

i really like the first 2 lines, great writing and the rest of the stanza has great imagery, maybe add a little more detail though? and the last line is great and catchy.

the first 2 of the next stanza are good, very relatable for listeners. The three after that are cliche though, so you may want to rethink them. the fourth is kinda cliche but the last makes up for it, i like it.

and the ending is good; short, sweet, and reinforces the message.

if you want to crit one of mine please check out "Burn Down Babylon" in my sig. Good work, keep on writing!