#1
Drew some inspiration to write this after listening to some Clapton.
This is sorta like a slow acoustical ballad with with a unique arrangement
of different guitar peices, but it all ties back into one simple chord progression for the vocals and lyrics. I know the lyrics and the ryhmes are a bit cliche too, but the song is more about the thoughts being portrayed and the mood of the music.

"Warmth of the Morning Sun"

I watched you walk away,
Five years ago today,
In the warmth of the morning sun.

Took a walk down to the stream,
To think of you and all my dreams,
As I watched the fish swim by.

If only you had stayed;
Coulda loved you everyday:
Breathe light back into my life:
Lift me up and take me higher.

Finnaly heard the news today,
My only love has gone astray,
In the warmth of the morning sun.

I closed my eyes and took a ride,
In my dreams is where she hides,
In the darkest corner of my mind.

The words I couldn't say:
They still haunt me to this day:
Breathe light back into my life:
Lift me up and take me higher.

In the warmth of the mornig sun:
Is the only place I belong:
In his gaze I'll stay:
Forever trapped inside endless days.

Lift me up and take me higher.

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#2
Not really sure how to crit this one. You acknowledge the cliches at the start and the flow and rhymes seem OK, if somewhat reliant on -ay rhymes.

I find that the two instances of the 2 lines "Breathe light back into my life/Lift me up and take me higher." don't seem to follow on from the previous 2 lines.

A minor grammatical point: most of the colons should probably be semi-colons, or even commas. For example "The words I couldn't say:" suggests the following line will be the words you couldn't say, but this doesn't appear to be the case.

Am I right in assuming there is a narrator change after the second "chorus"? You seem to switch from "her" to "his"