#2
I'm a huge fun of weird stuff, but be careful of being weird for the sake of weirdness. Like the distorted laughing around 4. Main thing was work on your timing on some guitar parts. I think it has more to do with your picking than timing really, if you attack the strings a little more aggressively I think you'll see significant improvements (I know I did).

Crit aside, I enjoyed this. Im a fan of some of the ideas you have going on sonically and melodically. Good job.

Here's mine: https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?p=12770216#post12770216
#3
Pretty cool song. I'm not a big fan of the beat.. like it would make the song flow better if the beat were a little sharper and more 4/4. This song is in 4/4, right? If I'm off on that then just forget my comment!

I like the idea, for sure.

You already commented on my song, but I'd love to discuss it more with you.
https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=785209
All my photobucket pics are dead so no links to my guitar build threads.
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#4
Im a huge fan of stoner rock, gotta love this. Reminds me a bit of QOTSAs first album. Vocals will be awesome with some work. Only thing that I think need a lot more work are the drums which are pretty bland. I demand more groove!
The atmosphere is true stoner style, works great. Good work.

My songs in my profile if you'd check it out.