#1
We’re never going to let this get the best of us
So this is my first song I've ever written, it's kind of a rough version because I'm busy writing a paper right now. Anyway, it's about a friend of mine who has some pretty serious health problems


We're never going to let this get the best of us
And that’s a promise baby
We’re gunna be alright (you’re gunna be all right)

So just stand tight, and close your eyes
And then maybe you can see
that survivals not out of sight
Oh cause baby I think Victory’s on our side

Because I think maybe victory is just a state of mind
Oh I hope it is (oh I hope it is)

Yeah maybe you were born to fly
But now’s just not the time
So keep you’re feet on the ground
and your wings at your sides

So just stand tight, everything’s gunna be alright

Because I think victory’s a state of mind
Oh I hope it is (oh I hope it is)-because you’re all I have to loose
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you nose started bleeding, so the first thing you do is post it on UG? i don't understand the reasoning behind that one my friend



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#2
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We're never going to let this get the best of us
And that’s a promise baby
We’re gunna be alright (you’re gunna be all right)
Very basic language here, bt its an ok intro and gets the point across

So just stand tight, and close your eyes
And then maybe you can see
that survivals not out of sight
Oh cause baby I think Victory’s on our side
I like the image of closing your eyes to see, very good!

Because I think maybe victory is just a state of mind
Excellent line
Oh I hope it is (oh I hope it is)
This seems weak after the previous line..

Yeah maybe you were born to fly
But now’s just not the time
So keep you’re feet on the ground
and your wings at your sides
This doesnt really tie in with the rest of the song, maybe an interlude before this to bring it in more would help?

So just stand tight, everything’s gunna be alright
Well tied in with the rest of the song

Because I think victory’s a state of mind
Oh I hope it is (oh I hope it is)-because you’re all I have to loose
Excellent end, i really like it! wouldnt change it, except if you change part of it earlier in the song, id change it to match..


Overall a good start, just flesh it out and youve got a good piece on your hands!
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#3
Thanks, I appreciate it
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you nose started bleeding, so the first thing you do is post it on UG? i don't understand the reasoning behind that one my friend



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#4
This is a really good song. I agree with atomic llama that that one part doesnt fit. Its still a really good song. Very emotionally moving. Espically for me. Great song. I like it a lot. Crit mine? Its called A tribute to You (On This Valentine's Day).