#1
c4c if ur crit is constructive

i tried to go at kind of a punk rock angle. I don't know how well i did, but i think i might have failed. watever. any comments would be helpful


Now we are here again
We’ll be together when the year ends
Why are you keeping score?
Life ain’t a rat race
What are you asking for?
You’re speaking your mind
And wasting my time
Together for eternity
Is not what I want
Is not what I want to be
With you

You are
Ms. You don’t know me
I know you too damn well
So far
You’ve gone to show me
So don’t think that I can’t tell
You are
Ms. I don’t care
But you’ve taken this way too far
So far
You don’t have a prayer
You don’t have a prayer

Always go against the grain
You never want to be the same
Time and time again
You don’t impress me
Why would you hurt your only friend?
It doesn’t make sense
Your entire existence
Seems to be a lie
But don’t neglect me
I just want to know why

You are
Ms. You don’t know me
I know you too damn well
So far
You’ve gone to show me
So don’t think that I can’t tell
You are
Ms. I don’t care
But you’ve taken this way too far
So far
You don’t have a prayer
You don’t have a prayer

You don’t have a prayer

In this world
There are two types of people
There comes a time to decide
What to do with you life
But I can’t help you because

You are
Ms. You don’t know me
I know you too damn well
So far
You’ve gone to show me
So don’t think that I can’t tell
You are
Ms. I don’t care
But you’ve taken this way too far
So far
You don’t have a prayer
You don’t have a prayer
#2
i didn't mind this. it was pretty good. parts of it seemed a little too repetitive, but it could just be me, and it wasn't to an annoying extent. i don't really see it as a punk rock song, more of a rock song, something like stone temple pilots or something along those lines. good work.

if that crit was worthy, here's mine: https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=787464
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