#1
I dunno about this one. I'm down for revisions or changes.

The forefront of killing art with every
"19thand20centuryliteratureinspiredlyrics"
And you're redefining genres with your
postmodern-existential noise.

Oh, you've read the Communist manifesto?
I bet "Karl" owned a tamagotchi
and had the inconvenience of educating the ill informed that there has NEVER been a true Communist state.
Bukowski? Overrated.
Your favorite author only had one book.
Or rather, the only one you've read.

Years from now
musicians will sit outside a campfire
and share albums in their heads.
Each with an instrument and
each with the knowledge of old pop songs.
Art will live on through the few that
refused to
SMASH THEIR INSTRUMENTS.

We'll be burning the top 40 mp3's in no time.
Last edited by Leonheart at Feb 17, 2008,
#2
theres no pattern whatsoever...is it supposed to not rhyme?
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#3
Quote by albinokrikit
theres no pattern whatsoever...is it supposed to not rhyme?


You got it.
#4
yeah i like it but.... the end is alittle off i dont like the whole camp fire thing. the rest is great though. the song follows its own ideas of nonconformity, by not conforming to traditional standards of rhyme and rhythem. good job.

and could you do me a favor and crit my song mare morbus, i need all the help i can get on it.