#1
Cant escape the asylum
mind is running free
free to what it wants

cant escape this insanity
hallucinations of a place called home
death defying images
painted on the corners of my mind

imagination becomes real
strobes before my eyes
another scape goat waits for me to rise!

you can kill the dream
stop it out like a fire
you kill a hero
smother him with your fists!
you can kill a god
put a golden bullet in his head
you can resurect past feelings
or put them aside!

im not insane im just a little on the southside
im not as free as you portray me to be
so stop pretending your perfect and get
on the same side as me

thats all i got im stuck
#2
Quote by BittertwistedZa
Cant escape the asylum
mind is running free
free to what it wants

Free to what it wants doesn't bring any kind of sense, let alone "can't escape the asylum, mind is running free"

cant escape this insanity
hallucinations of a place called home
death defying images
painted on the corners of my mind

Death defying images of what?

imagination becomes real
strobes before my eyes
another scape goat waits for me to rise!

Strobes of what? And the last line is very vague

you can kill the dream
stop it out like a fire
you kill a hero
smother him with your fists!
you can kill a god
put a golden bullet in his head
you can resurect past feelings
or put them aside!

These don't really seem to pertain to anything, but they are relevant with each other so to speak.

im not insane im just a little on the southside
im not as free as you portray me to be
so stop pretending your perfect and get
on the same side as me

This seems to have nothing to do with the whole song, except maybe the first "stanza".

thats all i got im stuck



All in all, I think you should try to write more vividly, put some imagery in your poetry... try and write a story with it.
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#3
that is plenty. you have enough lyrics for a three minute song unless your rapping them. add a solo in the bridge to stretch it out and you're all set set.

ignore the naysayer above me. your lyrics are out there and sound as ambiguous as nostrodomas' prophecies. no biggie, just rip em.