#1
had to write this twice cuz i accedently deleted it. idk just did it fast wanted to see ur guys' opinion maybe some advice?

take me off to neverland


another day of work
the same old ****
doesnt matter
if your a clerk
or a janitor
life isnt work
its supposed to be fun

so take me off to never land
where you never get old
where lifes just a game
where it never gets cold
or atleast so im told
i dont wanna grow up
so just take me to neverland

now whered all the fun go
i remember those times
where there was no work to do
i remember when
it was just fun and games
no more days like this ever again

uh oh here comes a baby
no more late nights out
oh god please save me
its to late now
all i can do is sit and pout

so take me off to never land
where you never get old
where lifes just a game
where it never gets cold
or atleast so im told
i dont wanna grow up
so just take me to neverland

so take me off to never land
where you never get old
where lifes just a game
where it never gets cold
or atleast so im told
i dont wanna grow up
so just take me to neverland
#5
jee man, its a bit anoying to read, like oranges said its whiny, also the "neverland talk" and "take me off" is a bit corny, maybe write bout how u really feel about ur work lol... who know though it may just need a band behind it...