ive tried to revamp thisand add a little more meaning so c4c tell me what you like bout it just a poem for now

Going through hell in an asylum of heaven
Living in doubt of whats yet to be proven
confined to a time in a place unknown
seeing is believing what isn't shown

falsifying all that trys to be
when the part that is missing
is part of me
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I really liked it while I was reading it, then I scrolled down and there wasn't any more! I think you should add a few more stanzas to this, because what you have so far is really really good. Just, make it a bit longer.