#1
Hey this is pretty much the first song I've tryed writing and I got the inspiration from my friend's breakup with her boyfriend so if you guys could give me pointer and comments that would be awesome. Any input is greatly appreciated.


I just wanted you to know
that I'm sorry for today
i never meant for it to go that far
or add to you another scar
im sorry for today

we thought we'd be ok
but where did we go wrong
i know you don't deserve this abuse
now again we're singin the blues
im sorry for today

i can't lie i miss her
but we're better off this way
we're free as a bird now we'll be alright
it's a rough road to travel it's a tough fight
i'm not sorry for today
i'm not sorry for today


thanks everybody
#2
Just sent the first few lines to my gf... we kinda had a bad day... =) tnx a bunch. I like it
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#3
Its very simple, and a little cliche, but a lot of people will relate to it because of that. Writing wise, its a nice solid peice of writing, flows quite well and whilst it doesnt really excite me, with the right music it could work well.
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#4
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I just wanted you to know
that I'm sorry for today
i never meant for it to go that far
or add to you another scar
im sorry for today

we thought we'd be ok
but where did we go wrong
i know you don't deserve this abuse
now again we're singin the blues
im sorry for today

i can't lie i miss her
but we're better off this way
we're free as a bird now we'll be alright
it's a rough road to travel it's a tough fight
i'm not sorry for today
i'm not sorry for today


i like this. i think it'd be cool if you started off all nice and acoustic-like, add an interlude, and then bust in overdrive on the last section. the only line i don't like is "now again we're singin the blues," it seems a little forced.
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#5
the overal song seems good, however (to me) the lyric i cant lie i miss her, but were better off this way doesnt seem to flow very smooth.
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#6

I just wanted you to know
that I'm sorry for today
i never meant for it to go that far
or add to you another scar
im sorry for today
well i like this intro simple but has ver good flow

we thought we'd be ok
but where did we go wrong
i know you don't deserve this abuse
now again we're singin the blues
im sorry for today
Again simple but very hard hitting, really packs a punch

i can't lie i miss her
but we're better off this way
we're free as a bird now we'll be alright
it's a rough road to travel it's a tough fight
i'm not sorry for today
i'm not sorry for today
Well this i really liked this part, good endin i like the 3rd and 4th line


Overall very good, simple but had a lot of meaning to your words and i could see and feel that so very good and i would like to see you put more in maybe

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