#1
Alright so this is my first song. I actually started this about a year ago and I've just been working on it every once in a while.

It's mostly just a compilation of riffs that sounded cool. It still needs some organizing. It's written for 3 guitars, a bass, drums, and a keyboard. I also need to change the solo because part of it is really impractical to play that fast. (the 8 16th notes before the triplets)

That's about it. Tell me what you guys think.

UPDATE!!! - 3/4/08

Doubled the length of the keyboard solo
Added a second guitar in the outro
Fixed guitar solo
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Last edited by Lord Of Donkeys at Mar 5, 2008,
#2
You successfully composed a goal-oriented song, but it has no soul. There's no emotion in it.
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#3
I like the beginning and the keyboard solo is pretty cool too. Just work on editing it more and adding things here and there and ull get it.
#4
it kind of reminds me of tool actually, to the guy above me, vocals would probably add some soul into it. And i son't see anything impractical about it, i mean, you could tap that part i'm sure. good job!
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#5
Pretty cool!
Keep adding stuff if your still working on it to make it as interesting as possible.
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#6
Awesome thanks guys. Should I add this to my sig?

EDIT: Also, to Dvnc, it's impractial for me because I'd have to roll my finger to hit the 12th fret on the G and go directly back to the 12th on the D, but i guess i could just move the notes on the G string to the D string and tap them. Thanks for the idea.
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#7
thats pretty good!!! it kinda reminds me off an old System of a Down song (back when they were still good)

have you ever had one of those moments where your like DAMN! i wish i couldve thought of that! yeah, well this is one of them haha
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have you ever had one of those moments where your like DAMN! i wish i couldve thought of that! yeah, well this is one of them haha

especially the solo!!! AH! good job anyway
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#9
that was really awesome
and i realy dont see what these aother guys are talkign about
theres emotion in it
really well written
didnt see anything that was too fast anywhere

did seem a little long though
mabey im just tired/bored haha
btu definatley a 10/10
nothing wrong at all
great solos too
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#10
Whoa that's reaaaaaaaally cool. Only thing I didn't like was the guitar solo. That's just personal opinion though really, I'm not much of a shred solo sorta thing guy.

But it was really good. I couldn't help but bang my head along with it. *applauds*
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#11
Dude that was excellent. Very awesome guitar solo. Very awesome harmonies to. Keyboard solo was short and sweet. Suits it very well. Only problem was i think the drums in the intro are abit out of place. But hey if you like it then it's all good.

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#13
Liking it dude, liking it alot

Nothing much to say on it, its great, like your other stuff it fits together well.The solo is nice and creepy, the harmonisations are really really creepy

Never seen much like it in here, good work man, keep it up

One thing, i think the keybaord solo was too short, the ending with the horsedive really fitted the heavy section after it, but i think you should make it about 4ish bars longer.

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#15
Your song is quite good and it does remind me of too..l the only problem is the over synth-y sound but thats probably from it being in MIDI
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Dude this is pretty awesome, really well done. It reminds me of the song home by dream theater (which is a good thing). The only thing I didn't like was how synthy everything sounded. Makes me want to check out your other songs.



I agree with rojomeansred, Dream Theater all out, it's really awsome, i loved every part of it, i don't know what the others are talking about the drums off time or something anyways

10/10
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Alright so this is my first song. I actually started this about a year ago and I've just been working on it every once in a while.

It's mostly just a compilation of riffs that sounded cool. It still needs some organizing. It's written for 3 guitars, a bass, drums, and a keyboard. I also need to change the solo because part of it is really impractical to play that fast. (the 8 16th notes before the triplets)

That's about it. Tell me what you guys think.

UPDATE!!! - 3/4/08

Doubled the length of the keyboard solo
Added a second guitar in the outro
Fixed guitar solo


Well done, I like the way you incorporated the keyboard.
Personally I'd include an interlude but that's just my taste only.
I'd set about recording it now. Bear in mind that guitar pro never does music the same justice that a good musician can do it.
#19
^ Yeah...

I bought a Digitech RP250 pedal recently and I think you can download a program and record on your computer through it. So once I buy a USB cable for it I may start recording.
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#20
I not sure if you can download any home recording software. I currently use Cubase LE - Got it free with my Zoom G2.1u.
#21
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There's no emotion in it.


I disagree.

Great song, awesome solo!!! If anything make it a little more original, sounds a little too much like Godsmack mixed with Dream Theater. Its good, just overdone. Maybe change keys? Timing?
#22
Ah sweet. Write some lyrics for us and let us know how it goes ^_^
#23
Very repetitive, sounded EXACTLY the same the WHOLE time.
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