#1
its a rocky road ahead
and my thoughts are scrambled
my brain tuned to various frequencies
but i don't care
because im wading in reveries

lost in your crystal gaze
you'll help me climb out of a watery grave
won't you?
the current rushes into my ears
but im not sure i want to leave

i've created a humble abode right here
nice and comfy
i've filled it with warm words
its dark and dank
but the moon gives me comfort

and she reads me like a book
flipping my pages one by one
but i just long for a dusty spot
on a shelf, so i can rewind a little
and go through it all again
in all honesty
its changed my perspective

tell me what you guys think, any input at all,
how it flows, word choice, direction, the whole shebang
don't afraid to be brutally honest, i want this song to mature into something beautiful
thanks in advance guys.
#2
i think it goes like this actually:

I've been a moonshiner,
For seventeen long years,
I've spent all my money,
On whiskey and beer,
I go to some hollow,
And sit at my still
And if whiskey dont kill me,
Then I dont know what will,

I go to some bar room,
And drink with my friends,
Where the women cant follow,
And see what I spend,
God bless them pretty women,
I wish they was mine,
Their breath is as sweet,
The dew on the vine,

Let me eat when I am hungry,
Let me drink when I am dry,
A dollar when I am hard up,
Religion when I die,
The whole world's a bottle,
And life's but a dram,
When the bottle gets empty,
It sure ain't worth a damn
My live set-up:
72 Tele Custom
TC Electronics Polytune
MXR Dynacomp
deviever Shoe Gazer
Way Huge Red Llama Clone
Effector13 Soda Meiser
Vintage Proco Rat
DOD Buzzbox
Dwarfcraft Robot Devil
EA Tremolo
Lovepedal Pickle Vibe
Traynor YBA-2B
#3
well ****,
didn't know the titles was taken.
sorry i guess, i'll get on changing it... uh, but what did you think of the actual song, if you don't mind?
#4
cant believe you've never heard of it. its an old traditional that's been covered by everyone from bob dylan to cat power and my band as well. your lyrics arent bad id be interested in hearing the music.
My live set-up:
72 Tele Custom
TC Electronics Polytune
MXR Dynacomp
deviever Shoe Gazer
Way Huge Red Llama Clone
Effector13 Soda Meiser
Vintage Proco Rat
DOD Buzzbox
Dwarfcraft Robot Devil
EA Tremolo
Lovepedal Pickle Vibe
Traynor YBA-2B
#5
i've probably heard the name somewhere,
it just didn't occur to me that it might already be a song,
oh well, this is bound to happen every once in a while.