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Before anyone asks, yes, that is the actual title. It's just convenient that it's also the genre. I usually write hard rock, but the greatness that is SKA was becoming angry at being ignored, so I appeased it.


Take from me a simple tip
There's nothing else to do once you trip
But to just pick yourself back up again
And give it your all until the very end

I remember that day, oh, like it was yesterday
Three o'clock and the news came as such a shock
If anyone had I never would have thought it to be you
But I guess that just goes to show how much I really know
And damn if it isn't true that out of all that could
I had hoped that it would never have been you

But life goes on, and on, and on, and on

Three years since the night
I contemplated what it means to be alive
The responsibility thrust upon you and me
As we came into the world with even the sky below our sight
Oh, we have no limits, but what we place upon ourselves
We have no freedom if we're trapped in our own hell
But if I could I would just say that it never had to end this way
After all nothing exists if we don't really believe

What was the point of all our trouble
Our tears and our sacrifice
If all that it takes to rip it away
Is something as simple as the edge of a knife
Nothing, nothing should ever take this turn
No, no, we've no reason to yearn
For a better life than we've been given
Because what we have is what we've earned

And it goes on, and on, and on, and on

Now it's to late to tell you this
An opportunity I should never have missed
But when my time comes I'll greet it with open arms
Because I'll be content with all that I've done

I'll meet you again (Somewhere between where we are)
At the end (It's not that far)
It won't come as swiftly (At least that's the plan)
I'll still await it more eagerly (Than you my friend)

Because I know after it all when my numbers called
I'll go with open arms and be content with all I've done

And it goes on, and on, and on, and on, and on, and...
#2
I like it a lot. Well written, concise, good rhythm. Solid stuff.

Some good rhyming inside the lines: ie. "Three o'clock and the news came as such a shock"..."But if I could I would just say that it never had to end this way".

I like the idea of this pattern here (nothing,nothing-no,no):
"Nothing, nothing should ever take this turn
No, no, we've no reason to yearn"

Overall great work--constructive criticism: I think some more concrete details would be nice, it's a bit on the vague side to what actually happened...a lot of contemplation, maybe a tinge too much