#1
please comment if you listen, even if just to say you liked it or your hated it. Go ahead and throw a rating on the song in my profile, too.

This is a song written by myself and my friend TJ. He plays all the live instruments on it, and I programmed the beats and synths, and produced/recorded it.

It's on my profile, called "Better Days"

It was written in a verse/chorus format and setup for vocals. There are none yet, though. (yes it will sound repetitive a couple times, but stick with it. The bridge around 3:40 is amazing)

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#2
nice job with production and recording here! also i really like the lead synth sound. you are right that bridge is really good, love the guitar tone. i see what you mean about it being set up for vocals, get someone with a great dynamic range to sing over it and you will have a winner.
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#3
The guitar is really good, loving the tone... I think this has sort of 80's flavour to it with the analog synth sounds and drums. Catchy chord progression in the chorus! Damn, I'd love to hear vocals here! Nice guitar lead towards the end... All in all, well produced and played song. Now get some vocals here! Keep it up guys!

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#4
Thanks for the compliment on the synths. Thats the part I wrote and based this song on. I had the beat on a hip hop track for a friend that we ditched, but I loved the beat so much. The synth was on another hip hop track that wasn't working, and I was regretting not doing something with it. It's actually one of the few times I played a synth part on the keyboard (because I am no keyboard player)

When TJ heard this track, just beat and synths, he plugged in his bass and threw down that line on it. The guitar parts just followed in line... but damn I love that bass.
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#5
I liked it! It was really catchy.
I'm not sure what "synths" are, but I'm sure they were good too.
The guitar was what really stood out to me, though.
It was really good! =)
#6
Thanks for the crit.

This has a cool hip-hop feel. And it's funky too. It's a cool combination. I like the funky guitars, especially in the part that I'm assuming is the chorus. There's a lot of cool licks and riffs throughout the whole thing, it's definitely a catchy song. I wouldn't really call the bridge at 3:40 funky, but it fit with the rest of the song surprisingly well.

Overall, this is a cool song. You've really got a solid foundation for the vocals. Add in the vocals and you could end up with something amazing. I'd be interested to hear it with vocals, actually.

Anyway, nice job. Keep it up!
#7
Quote by GuitarGrrl16
I liked it! It was really catchy.
I'm not sure what "synths" are, but I'm sure they were good too.
The guitar was what really stood out to me, though.
It was really good! =)



"Synths" is short for synthesizers. The strings and other synthetic sounds were created by the computer. I tweaked the effects on them to make something unique and played the simple 3 note melody on the keyboard. (midi controller)

The drum beat was created much in the same manner, only using a sequencer to make it perfectly in time.
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#9
I loved it. The only thing I thought that didn't work, was the tone on the chords on the chorus part, sounded a bit flangey?
#10
The backing to this song makes it really full! I wasn't sure how it was going to be at first, but I have to be honest, the song grew on me as it went along. It is very true to the alt-funk sound!

I really enjoyed that solo/bridge, too! It took the song out with a bang.

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#11
Thats really good man, it doesnt necessarily NEED vocals (could be a backing for a porno or something? lol) I'm sure some jamiroquai singing would compliment this amazinly


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#12
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I loved it. The only thing I thought that didn't work, was the tone on the chords on the chorus part, sounded a bit flangey?



Which one? There are three or four guitar parts and two or three synths layered on the chorus. I think the combination of all that together might be too much for you.

One of the guitar parts is severely wah'ed up and down, but its pretty quiet. I suppose you could be talking about that particular track.

When we made this song, we just took the gloves off and went all-out. Many hours of getting F-ed up and jamming and this was the result.

Thank you all for your kind words. I will pass this along to my buddy as well.
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#13
Hey man, thanks for the crit. This track is very funky. I love that guitar tone, and the synths were done very well. They sound perfect for your song. As for me, I thought the chords during what I think was the chorus, I thought they were perfect. I'd keep that nice overdriven sound. I think it fits the song perfectly. Can't wait to hear some vocals on here.

Funky fresh, mate.
#14
this track is super groovy. I was bobbin my head the entire way through. It kinda made me think that Loverboy wrote a song for the Kill Bill movies... hahaha, i wonder if anyone else would ever think that.
seriously though, this is awesome.
Keep it up and thanks for the crit.
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#15
Really really cool track its very hip hoppy but still funky. You sir have some good production skills. The guitars and bass are very tasteful throughout and I can't honestly see a bad thing in this song appart from the lack of vocals.

This could be a seriously good song once you get some vox on it so for now 8/10
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#16
Yeah, like I was saying... it was originally intended as a backtrack for hip hop. It took off and became its own instrumental beast, though.. leaving me thinking it won't work for Hip hop anymore.

What's your take on that? Should I push my friend the rapper to work on this?
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#17
No hell! Don't add rap to this.. this is as good as Red Hot Chili Peppers!
Nice groove man.. your guitar sound is awesome.
#18
wow lol... something you could dance too or just have playing in the car. It doesn't even need vocals..just sounds like quality music to me mate. Well Done!
#20
Catchy stuff - all that's missing is Bootsy!

I know funk isn't usually bass heavy, but I really think it'd be worth mastering with a greater emphasis on the lower mids. My speakers are naturally a little mid-biased and I still can't hear that much detail below 1k-ish.
Your production's superb, everything fits neatly into the stereo picture without sounding crowded at any point. It'd still be nice to hear more points of minor interest, maybe a few tasteful licks from the guitar or keys, though obviously a full-blown solo would detract from the point a bit. The guitar coming in around 3:50 is well handled, though to my ears a warm, smooth jazz sort of tone would have been more sonically interesting at that point.
#21
The bass is low and heavy. It's played on a 5 string Warmoth with active pickups... and it thumps really hard if you play it on something with some kick. I originally had it a lot louder in the mix and it thumped the hell out of my car stereo. I dialed the bass down a bit to make it smoother.

I'm actually a little unhappy with the mix in the lower freq's though, and I tried to clean it up with mastering instead of going back into Sonar to adjust track volumes individually. It gets really time consuming to mix something that sounds this good.

As far as adding licks goes... it was written for vocals. The vocals would add the spice you're looking for. Anyone wanna sing on it?
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