The ideas were good... But it sounded like one huge buildup until 3:48.. And even then it still sort of sounded like a buildup in a way.
The transitions weren't the best in between each riff or idea either.
The first part of the song didn't really fit that well with what starts at 3:20.

I thought the part from 3:20 to the end sounded cool though. Good job. =)

Care to listen to mine? Bottom of my sig. =)