#1
IMPORTANT NOTE:
it's not complete. i'll write a bridge later.

ok i wrote this stuff in half an hour. i have no idea what genre it's supposed to be, the words just spewed out of my head.

so i'd appreciate any comments as to how horrendous my subconsciousness's writing skills are.

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A vacant smile
words by mukkey.

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that empty look in your eyes
as i sing you lullabies
under the midnight sky
not even looking at me

staring across the lake
what shape do your dreams take
cause i can't read your face
you're wearing a mask


(chorus)
and the touch of your lips
feel like ice on my skin
and the vows that you make
are just paper thin

and those empty eyes
are they worth my while
but i'm still here entranced
by your vacant smile

with you in the mall
it's honey and flowers
sacharrine for hours
the roles that we play

but when they are gone
then so too are you
whisked far away
to where i can't say


(chorus)
cause the touch of your lips
feel like ice on my skin
and the vows that you make
are just paper thin

and those empty eyes
are they worth my while
but i'm still here entranced
by your vacant smile


(bridge)

(chorus)

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end.
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NOOB KIT FTW

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Lyrical Insanity:

Chasing Shadows
#2
haha, like i said, i wrote it in abt 30 mins...

but greatly appreciated nightraven.

incidentally to any mods or veterans, where do i post a corrected version? do i edit this thread or start a new one?
Yamaha ERG 121
Yamaha F370TBS
Yamaha GA-10

NOOB KIT FTW

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Lyrical Insanity:

Chasing Shadows