#1
Yeah I've started work on a rock opera intitled The Story of Shane and The Blankey.
It's about my little adopted brother named Shane. I got the inspiration from when he tore his blankey. It's all sad but of course it gets happy and whatnot.
The songs are really short but hell it's a rock opera.


What are your thoughts on this Pit? And how should I end this? He's only six so I want to come up with a bad ass ending.

EDIT:

Where It Begins
It started up at school one day when a boy, he got me mad, I bit his arm real hard and it had made him really sad. The teacher frowned upon me and she said that I’ve been bad, the world changed all for me when I went back to dad.

Here I am, sitting at my window. The police pull into the driveway and then they approach the door, the red marks were on my ears could hurt any less more. I sit here with my blankey wondering what will happen to me next. I knew my life wouldn’t turn out…to...be…the…best!!!!

A woman dressed up in a suit took me down to a home, she told me that I’ll like here and I be safe and I’ll be loved and that these people were sent from up above. By the time that I had liked it there they said that they were through with me sometime I wish the world would...just…leave…me…be!!!!

Where I Traveled
They searched all far and wide for me, looking for a fam-i-ly and now I sit a boy of three just lost and so alone. They put me through a thousand homes no one to tell me where to go they tried and tried but I always seemed to fail. They tried to find a home to give but I never really got to live just going from one house to another house.

The world just seemed so different, but people stayed the same, I never made a good impression isn’t that a bloody shame? They never really got to me and I did no shame to them they never understood that I’m a flower…with…no…stem!!!

Only Bit of Love
Since they couldn’t find parents for me and I was at the age of three the only person that did befriend me!!!! was my trustworthy blanket. Just like a Linus with no blankey I’m a minus and I wouldn’t feel care. It was there for me it shared my pain with me and it just seemed to love me. Since I had no happiness my life showed nothing but crappiness all I could do was sit and cry.

God did have me in his tug, he would squash me like a bug but when I needed a big hug!!! there was my trustworthy blanket.


Yeah so there are the first three songs in it. Mind you, it took me all of about 30 minutes all together.
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Last edited by iceman95 at Feb 24, 2008,
#3
How are you writing it if you dont even know what it is?
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#4
He has an epiphany and realizes he doesn't need the blanket, but still carries a piece of it in his pocket to remind him of the happier, simpler times of childhood.
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#5
you could do some "selma and louise" sort of ending. But he'll have to use a motorcycle and I imagine him looking like a fairly young james dean...
#6
posting in potentially epic thread.


when you're done can you upload it to UG?
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#7
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How are you writing it if you dont even know what it is?

I do know what it is. It starts out when he bit some kid at school and he got beat bad by his dad for it and then social services takes him away and he goes through all kinds of homes with out really having a family until he finds my family and we welcome him and love him. He got him when he was three btw.
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#12
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He grows up and turns it into a sportcoat.

*E-cookie to whoever gets the reference.*


Total Linus. There's a reference to him in the opera too.
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#14
Cool, make sure you make it like Jesus Of Suburbia. That's a song from this super awesome kind of underground band named Green Day. You guys should check them out.
I'm the same as I was when I was six years old
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#15
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I'm going to make a Hip Hop opera. A Hip Hopera.


Dear god, that is so awful.

Awful and hilarious.

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#16
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Total Linus. There's a reference to him in the opera too.




That's the first thing I thought of when you said blankey, lol.
Peace.
#18
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That's the first thing I thought of when you said blankey, lol.

I want that cookie SOOOOOOO bad.
I'm the same as I was when I was six years old
And oh my god I feel so damn old
I don't really feel anything
#19
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That's the first thing I thought of when you said blankey, lol.


YES!!!
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#20
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I want that cookie SOOOOOOO bad.


You can have one too, cause I see you're also from NJ.

Peace.
#21
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I'm going to make a Hip Hop opera. A Hip Hopera.


LMAO ur funni.


Anyway, end it by him killing himself. Trust me, it'll work.
#22
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I'm going to make a Hip Hop opera. A Hip Hopera.



Oh lord...

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#23
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You can have one too, cause I see you're also from NJ.


Yay, I'll be at your house to pick it up!!!
I'm the same as I was when I was six years old
And oh my god I feel so damn old
I don't really feel anything
#24
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Cool, make sure you make it like Jesus Of Suburbia. That's a song from this super awesome kind of underground band named Green Day. You guys should check them out.

I'd tell you that you failed at humour with that, but you already did that when you wrote your sig
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#25
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when you're done can you upload it to UG?


Yeah I'll upload it, but I need a band first.
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#26
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I'd tell you that you failed at humour with that, but you already did that when you wrote your sig

Ah, but my sig is not an attempt at humor. The Green Day thing was, even though they are good. My sig is not though.
I'm the same as I was when I was six years old
And oh my god I feel so damn old
I don't really feel anything
#27
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Ah, but my sig is not an attempt at humor. The Green Day thing was, even though they are good. My sig is not though.

It's not an attempt at humour? So you're being serious?

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That's me

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#28
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It's not an attempt at humour? So you're being serious?


Shocking, isn't it?
I'm the same as I was when I was six years old
And oh my god I feel so damn old
I don't really feel anything
#30
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It's not an attempt at humour? So you're being serious?



Oh God...
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#31
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It's not an attempt at humour? So you're being serious?




*Awaits a genre-bashing-flame-thread*
Now that'll be fun!
#32
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I'm going to make a Hip Hop opera. A Hip Hopera.


That's what R Kelly called his Trapped In The Closet series - Hip Hopera.
#33
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*Awaits a genre-bashing-flame-thread*
Now that'll be fun!



not in my thread it won't!
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#34
Cool. I'm making a Rock Oprah.




I just killed the joke, didn't I?
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#35
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Cool. I'm making a Rock Oprah.




I just killed the joke, didn't I?


meh, it could've been better
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#36
BTW what do you guys think of it so far? You know, the lyrics that is.
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#37
He summons satan and they have a guitar battle on top of a volcano.
two and a half men.
#38
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He summons satan and they have a guitar battle on top of a volcano.


and he has like a shred from the blankey tied to the head of the guitar
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