#1
It's my very first song so I don't expect it to be good but here goes..

People lie as people die
Black and white ain't no return
People die and people cry
Sun turns black as our time burns
People cry people die
Over and over and we never learn
Over and over and no return

It all seems like yesterday, like a dream like a lie
And now it's time to say goodbye
Goodbyes so sudden and we never cry
It all seems like it's yesterday, just another page to turn
Days pass by like ashes burn
Ashes burn like days that won't return

People just never learn

People lie as people die
Black and white ain't no return
People die and people cry
Sun turns black as our time burns
People cry people die
Over and over and we never learn
Over and over and no return

As we cry
As people die
Sun turns black and our lives just burn
Our ashes burn and no return
#2
sounds a lot like dirt on the grave by B.L.S...
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#3
sounds good, at least in my head it does.... then again i just imagine that being sung by metallica and freakin awthum solos being played.... omg since this is in my head, good ol' Cliff can have a solo....that is awthum .......... well any i think its good, especially for your first song
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#6
I listened to it and, yeah it kinda does. The music for the song's gonna be way different than that and it's not slow. I don't think it will sound like BLS when it's done.